Reflection of Draft of Exploratory Essay

The first draft felt very intimidating at first because I was very rusty on doing this type of essay, but I did have some knowledge of what to do. I remembered back to my freshman year of high school, when my science teacher had to make me do a thirteen-page essay on a butterfly specie. This helped me to understand how the essay works, how is it portrayed, and how to write an unbiased essay. Then came the obstacle that I was afraid of, making a topic. I went to my tutor in the PAL center as usual, and talked to her about the topic I thought of since the day it was assigned. She told me that it would be a great idea, saying that it could be beneficial and it would be accepted by the professor. So, I sent the email and checked if that topic would be accepted, and it did. I was excited to write about something that I actually wanted to write about, a topic that I could relate to since I do play video games often.

Then came in the writing, which was tiring. I almost felt as if I could not even write the whole essay since I was becoming very biased, and tried to stop myself from giving my own opinion. I looked through many articles to help bring out both the pros and cons of the topic, helping the essay. I found more pros than cons, which got me worried after the first draft. I was already used to explaining the evidence, but there were still some points that I could have explained a little better. I tried to think more about how I could connect each idea together so that the whole essay can flow nicely, and created an outline that would help it. I ended up feeling proud of my work, as if I did something wonderful and beneficial.

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