Reflection of Draft #2 of Research Paper

            When writing the first draft, I was still confused on what my thesis would be and what I would argue about. I continued to do my research, trying to find a way to combat my arguments but also that would help out afterwards so I could have counter-claims in my essay. Something that I also needed to do was to create new arguments, there are many things to add on to my essay that many people do not really know of. This could help the audience have a better knowledge of what really is gun violence and how creating stronger gun control laws can help create a safer environment for us.

            I could not go to my tutor for help mainly due to the sickness I had, but I did find help through my peers and what they wrote on my essay. Most of the time there were just comments I did not understand why they wrote it, but I found ways to help me leave the essay the way it is and revising it at the same time. This has helped me to understand more how to critique my own work and find mistakes that I would not find before. This second draft helped me to create a better more formed out paper for my research.

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